monechri2b
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#1 | Posted: 13 Oct 2009 12:32 | Edited by: monechri2b
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Hi everybody,
as you may know, I post rather long TG Captions at MY BLOG.
I want to know what you think of them. I need general and even specific opinions.
The good ones, the bad ones, what is improvable....
I am going to let you know, when I post a new one right here.
Please comment here or directly at the post ( I activated comments for everybody).
Have fun reading.
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GreatSage
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#2 | Posted: 13 Oct 2009 18:18
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I do like your captions - they are good fun and I am often impressed at your skill in linking several images together to create a coherent story.
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fleur
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#3 | Posted: 14 Oct 2009 02:39 | Edited by: fleur
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Cleverly done and lots of work to create I am sure. Sorry not really my thing personally though as I generally prefer erotica to pornography. But well, thats just me. : )
PS I love your TG links blog, amazing. Thanks for putting it together.
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Aardvark
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#4 | Posted: 14 Oct 2009 06:09
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Nicely done. I like the way you tell a story with pictures. You have a good sense of humor. Your pictures of the cancer survivor outside being given a test, stretching and bending over while the "doctor" watches, was fun. I also enjoyed her flipping the producer the bird. It was imaginative and expressive,and what happened afterward was logical and funny.
Personally, I'm not into porn, so I'm probably not your target audience. I'm more interested in the emotional aspects of TG than the sexual -- although if the sex fits the story, that's fine, too. :) For what it was, though, it was quite good.
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tristra
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#5 | Posted: 14 Oct 2009 16:20
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The presentation is nice.
The slide shows work well
To me it seems that English is not your first language and some of the dialog is vague or redundant because of that.
I have to agree with some of the others, this is much more erotica with a TG hook than TG fiction.
If you like that kind of stuff great but it's just not my thing.
I'll avoid the page long rant on the difference between erotica and fiction or stories.
All in all good work and I'm sure you have a large silent audience.
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monechri2b
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#6 | Posted: 14 Oct 2009 16:40
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I am happy, that many people like my work. ( I also see that with help of the counter. ;-) )
I would love to create some less sexual stories.
I often tried to find pictures with one and the same person, which have no sexual content.
As you can see in the 'Thirst' stories, I found some, but these were the only ones.
The problem is that as far as I know the only source where one and the same person is in several related pictures,
wich are also a possible source for TG stories, are erotic galleries.
I am working on the problem with the language. My mother tongue is German.
PS: I am very happy for these critiques and hope to get more and even more specific ones.
PS: If anyone knows a resolution for the mentioned problem, I would be very happy to get known of it ;-)
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tristra
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#7 | Posted: 14 Oct 2009 17:43 | Edited by: tristra
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Try movie clips. There are lots of movies. it's still a little hard to stitch together but it can be done. Femur has some.
I know the style is different but THESE might give you some ideas as to what can be done with movie clips.
My suggestion as far as the language thing is to have some one who has English as a first language look over it before you post. Maybe share on the forum or something before hand.
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monechri2b
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#8 | Posted: 15 Oct 2009 04:05 | Edited by: monechri2b
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Thank you for this hint, I am going to try this.
To all: Please write down the negative and if you wans also positive aspects about my captions. The more you write, the more I can fix.
I would also be happy to see some comments at my blog. ;-)
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GreatSage
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#9 | Posted: 15 Oct 2009 10:03
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If I recall correctly I find the mechanism for leaving comments at your site a little awkward - or I might be confusing you with someone else - I know it is like that with at least one Blogspot, it usually refuses to acknowledge anonymous comments and I refuse to use my Google mail sign in as that has my real name.
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commotion22
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#10 | Posted: 15 Oct 2009 10:35 | Edited by: commotion22
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tristra: Try movie clips. There are lots of movies. it's still a little hard to stitch together but it can be done. Femur has some.
I don't want to derail your thread, Monechri, but I'd like to ask Tristra where one can find the extensive clips from individual movies to use as in Femur's movie "recaps?" I'd thought of giving this a try before I got caught up with DAZ.
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monechri2b
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#11 | Posted: 15 Oct 2009 14:37 | Edited by: monechri2b
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GreatSage: it usually refuses to acknowledge anonymous comments and I refuse to use my Google mail sign in as that has my real name.
You can decide between using your googleaccount, any other account or to post anonymously or with a other nickname.
commotion22: I don't want to derail your thread, Monechri, but I'd like to ask Tristra where one can find the extensive clips from individual movies to use as in Femur's movie "recaps?" I'd thought of giving this a try before I got caught up with DAZ.
For real, it is very hard to find movies with usable scenes and to think of a story that matches.
It is much easier to create a story at the base of a erotic gallerie or even more than one of them.
I don't give up at least trieing to find a movie and create a story.
Sorry for my bad English in this and all the other posts.;-)
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tristra
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#12 | Posted: 15 Oct 2009 18:22
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The easiest thing is to take the screen shots yourself in ether a movie editor or player program on your computer
Just pop the DVD of the movie you want the clips from in your computer.
most media players have a snap shot or screen shot feature. it's a little different for each but it shouldn't be to hard to find.
Then go to the scene you want to use and take your screen shot
The other way I know is to Do web searches.
But you need a movie, Actor, or theme first.
I would go into detail but I have retyped this thing to many times already today
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monechri2b
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#13 | Posted: 16 Oct 2009 05:24 | Edited by: monechri2b
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Still did not find a movie for this pusposes.
Doing websearches is a good idea, too. I am also going to try this.
I posted a new caption. (20 pages)
I tried to create it in a way, that as many as possible people get what they want to get.
I have emotional as well as magical and sexual attributes included.
Please comment on it an tell me what you think and what can be made better.
Click here
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GreatSage
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#14 | Posted: 16 Oct 2009 08:57
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I liked that a lot - I wonder what happened later?was it permanent? has reality shifted? I remember reading a story on TG Stories I think it was - that had a boy turned into a girl by his Piiano teacher - wish I could remember the title of it, this reminded me a little bit of it.
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monechri2b
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#15 | Posted: 16 Oct 2009 10:52 | Edited by: monechri2b
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Well, that's an odd fluke, I don't know the story. If my English was better, I would read TG stories, as it is to hard and less fun for me now. I got the idea, when I saw the piano at another pic. I typed in piano and found more.
I picked the scenario with the most galleries and began to think of a story. I read the critic to my old captions.
Aardvark's critic was the first one I wanted to improve, so I thought of an emotional story. And so on...
Edit: 18:24 (GMT+1) :
Now I wrote a 'end'.
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GreatSage
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#16 | Posted: 16 Oct 2009 11:59
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Nice - I am glad it was a happy one :)
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Aardvark
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#17 | Posted: 16 Oct 2009 13:38
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Ah. Das war sehr nett.
Laura's spell, or whatever it was, changed him into what Laura wanted, and it took over her mind while they made lesbian love, but it released her at the end. It was as if the spell was showing her how great it could be to be Laura's lover, then left it up to her to decide what she wanted to do.
Very nice and gentle. Most TG stories are rather crude; this was not. Well done.
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monechri2b
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#18 | Posted: 28 Oct 2009 13:16 | Edited by: monechri2b
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---the comic now has it's own thread---
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monechri2b
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#19 | Posted: 28 Oct 2009 23:55 | Edited by: monechri2b
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---the comic now has it's own thread---
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